Friday, July 15, 2011

Is this a good start to a story?

It's good, but you need your paragraphs to flow. Not abruptly stop like they are. The words need to guide into each other--it gets quite repetitive after a while and that is a major turn-off when it comes to reading/writing. Don't do that, it's a big no no, hahaha. So anyways, just edit it to make your words flow into one another ..

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