Thursday, July 14, 2011

I need some feedback for a very short story?

I like it. When you first read the first couple of sentences you immediately assume that the narrator is the one being attacked, but as you read on you find that he/she is infact the attacker. Except for a couple of minor grammatical and spelling errors, it is good. One thing though, the word 'hop' used near the end gives me a mental image of a bunny... Im not sure this is the mental picture you want for a fearsome predator... Just saying

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